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jahnocli
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United Kingdom
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Posted - 06/24/2012 :  2:43:01 PM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
Thanks. Won't be working on it tonight -- it's England v. Italy in the quarter-finals!
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sbtamu
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Posted - 06/24/2012 :  4:05:51 PM  Show Profile  Visit sbtamu's Homepage  Reply with Quote
quote:
Originally posted by jahnocli

Thanks. Won't be working on it tonight -- it's England v. Italy in the quarter-finals!



Spain is going to win again!

http://www.youtube.com/user/sbtamu
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jahnocli
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United Kingdom
246 Posts

Posted - 06/24/2012 :  5:48:09 PM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
You may be right. It certainly won't be England. There's always next time...
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jahnocli
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United Kingdom
246 Posts

Posted - 06/26/2012 :  6:23:25 PM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
Work in progress: http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/6/wip1o.png/
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Kelleytoons
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Posted - 06/26/2012 :  7:09:14 PM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
Love the characters and set -- can hardly wait to see what happens.
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Wena
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United Kingdom
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Posted - 06/27/2012 :  05:21:12 AM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
jahnocli, I like your characters and the background, the artwork in marvelous you should not be a shamed of them. Let's see them at work.

I think, that it is the best park so fare and you ought to get a medal for that. And as for the plumber's tool seat its so much detail.

Like Mike I cant wait to see them in action!

Wena

Edited by - Wena on 06/27/2012 05:24:38 AM
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jahnocli
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United Kingdom
246 Posts

Posted - 06/27/2012 :  09:31:28 AM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
I've just finished the script -- would like to know what you think! Don't be shy...

EXTERIOR PARK, SUNNY DAY. J & W ARE ARGUING

J - For the last time, I will not be party to a logical
dichotomy in the space-time continuum!

W - You always have an excuse -- can't you break the laws
of physics just once? It's not like we don't need the
money...

J - What if I help this guy, and he goes back in time and
murders your mother? You will cease to exist!
Hmmm, maybe that's not such a bad idea -- where does
your mother live again?

W - She lives somewhere where time-travelling psychopaths
can't get to her -- Death Valley.

J - Death Valley!? How does she keep cool?

W - She watches reruns of 'Happy Days'

J - Har har...

W - ..and talking of staying cool, what about the poor
prisoners in that van? Must be 90 degrees out here.

J - If you want me to say 'air con', I'm just not going to.

W - You just did -- and that was a logical dichotomy!

J - I can't stand around arguing with you when you are right
all the time -- I got a time machine to fix -- and he
wants it done yesterday!

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Wena
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United Kingdom
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Posted - 06/27/2012 :  12:46:39 PM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
That sound's great jahnocli, I look forward TO IT

THAT give's others a little head start to think on how to follow that!!!

Wena
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hayasidist
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United Kingdom
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Posted - 06/27/2012 :  3:26:58 PM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
Hey John -- you asked so here's my 2cents on this so here goes...

script seems to reads as though joe changes his mind from a "not doing it" to "here I go then" right at the last minute ... felt like a bit of a "bump"... maybe an extra few words at the start of joe's last line

"[pause - reflect - concede]. pah! ok - I can cope with another dichotomy! [turn to leave, over shoulder to W..] Well, I can't stand here ..."

if that pushes you over the 60 secs (and anyone cares!): cut "Hmmm, maybe that's not such a bad idea" and swap it for [evil grin at W] (so Joe's line is "...You will cease to exist! [evil grin] Where does your mother live again?); cut "She lives somewhere" (so W's line starts "Where time travelling ...")

(personal taste here... I'd have had Joe barf rather than laugh at Happy Days ...)

but it's your call ...

looking forward to the finished product!
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jahnocli
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United Kingdom
246 Posts

Posted - 06/27/2012 :  3:55:14 PM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
Thanks for the kind words everybody (and for the suggestions, Paul). Yes, Joe changes his mind -- worn down by Wilma's inexorable logic! He uses 'dichotomy' against her at the beginning, and the tables are turned at the end. Don't *think* that was too much of a bump...It's very word-driven, though, you are right -- maybe needs some more non-verbal stuff.
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jahnocli
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United Kingdom
246 Posts

Posted - 07/04/2012 :  09:41:09 AM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
Apologies for non-appearance of this episode -- just life getting in the way... Will have it ready for beginning of next week.
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jahnocli
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United Kingdom
246 Posts

Posted - 07/10/2012 :  06:21:51 AM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
Progress to date: https://vimeo.com/user3607543/videos (Obviously it's 'plumber1g', top left).

I recorded the voice soundtrack over the weekend (my eldest daughter helped with Wilma), but I have to say that the sound quality sucked. I mean, it sucked powerful hard. After some fruitless hours with Audacity, I decided to present it as a sort of animated comic. Here is the first scene. Should have the rest finished by tomorrow evening. This format has its problems, too (actions getting lost, timing of speech bubbles etc.), but at least it means I can finish up and hand it on...
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Wena
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United Kingdom
1050 Posts

Posted - 07/10/2012 :  07:47:12 AM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
I am waiting "on pins"!!! Come on jahnocli!

Wena
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jahnocli
Junior Member



United Kingdom
246 Posts

Posted - 07/10/2012 :  10:49:24 AM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
I am about a third the way through. I'm going as fast as I can!
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rocky53204
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USA
856 Posts

Posted - 07/10/2012 :  9:05:35 PM  Show Profile  Reply with Quote
Take your time... remember, this is also meant as a learning experience.
(Not a trial by fire)
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